Friday, September 19, 2008

Too corny?

...because my revision is worlds better than what was once here.


b luis grey said...

What sort of story will this be?

ROHIT said...
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GeekyQuill said...

Thanks, b luis grey,

I'd call it a young adult fantasy.

Stacey said...

Hey geeky, I have helped my friend edit her query several times...without taking up a HUGE spot on here, my main suggestion would be to be less cryptic.

One suggestion I saw online while researching what agents want said, cut out the "what if" questions or "will she" questions. Cause in the end we all know they will because then there would be no story.

The purpose of the query is not only to get an agent interested in your story, but to spill the beans about what it is about. If they don't have enough info about the plot ahead of time, they are likely to reject it because you are keeping too much a secret.

There are things I noticed in the text of the first chapter I would also change...but I won't get into that. It was interesting though...I want more! And that is a good sign.

GeekyQuill said...

Thanks, Stacey,

Yeah, I think I was trying to sound like a dust jacket or something.

I'm working on a rewrite on the first chapter. Well, in truth I'm *avoiding* a rewrite on the first chapter. On the upside, the kids will get homemade cookies and the house will be clean. :)

Stacey said...

I know that feeling! The baby is asleep, so instead of cleaning, I am online and writing.